You haven’t actually introduced any ideas in your introduction. Don’t use this sentence “This essay will look through these reasone and give suggestion of possible solution to avoid the traffic congestion .” You don’t need to tell the examiner you will give reasons and solutions because the examiner also has the instructions. You must introduce your ideas. Please see my model essays to see how to do this.
In the recent centuries , the number of vehicles on roads has been shown an increasing trend . This is mainly because of the affordability of cars and poor roads . There are anumber of possible solution can be implemented to avoid this traffic congestion .
In the recent centuries ,it has been noticed a huge increase in traffic congestion ,which is considerd one of the the big problems among large cities nowadays ,the increasing number of vehicles on the roads has came as a result of many reasone and situation . This essay will look through these reasone and give suggestion of possible solution to avoid the traffic congestion .
Driver fatigue isn’t talked about a lot, but how well can we expect anyone to drive when they’re having trouble staying awake. Most of the car accidents caused by drowsy driving occur at night. If you find yourself wanting to fall asleep at the wheel, pull over when it’s safe and try to take a quick 30 minute power nap.
Falls cause 70% of accidentaldeaths of persons over age 75 .
Most highways are littered with the scattered remains of a tire blowout. Tire blowouts can cause you to lose control of your vehicle, and they are especially dangerous for bigger automobiles like semi-trucks. When encountering a tire blowout, try to maintain control of your vehicle and pull over safely and you will likely avoid a serious car accident.
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There are two main issues. Firstly, you present no clear opinion. Which do you think it best? You must provide a clear answer with your view. If you fail to follow the instructions, you will not get a good score. Secondly, you are over paraphrasing. Are you really paraphrasing the word “bicycle” as “two wheel vehicle”? That is completely inappropriate. Please watch my video about paraphrasing in the vocabulary section of this blog. Also go through all my lessons carefully to learn more about writing task 2. You might also want to check your basic grammar – articles, use of plural nouns, prepositions etc. At present your grammar is around band score 5.5.
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You should definitely spend more time working on producing accurate English rather than trying to impress the examiner. Also review your grammar. At present, I wouldn’t recommend booking your test.